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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Drowning

    Bonjour! It's Beth (: Naylor... Okay i don't really have time for a proper review, but I did really like this piece because of the situation and emotion. yet it ...

    Oct 13, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Monkey Bars

    This was very descriptive and made me think.. (yes I know the doctor said that was bad for me!) But i agree with maddy.. you lost some of the emotion ...

    Oct 13, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Misguided Angel

    I kind of agree it was a bit cliche and the rhyming and rhythm were a bit off, but overall i really thought it used pretty description and was nice ...

    Oct 13, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: His Eyes Were of the Ocean

    First posts are fun to review (: Wow. That was really attention grabbing, i really love the way you write! 'I used to look up into the bright blue sky, ...

    Oct 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Look Left: Another Preview

    Then he jerked up, his face the picture of agony. I never before had seen that expression on any face, living or dead, real or fantasy. It was beyond terror. ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Look Left: Preview 2, when Theo finds Tessie again.

    i was almost crying when i read that, have you written all the rest of this yet> just not posted it? cuz i soo wanna read it, But in the ...

    Sep 15, 2009
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Another Song: in need of a title. Please suggest :)

    title, it's not you, it's us? you shall have to play this to me in friday in music, cause i'm not that great at putting the chords to the lyrics ...

    Sep 15, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Angel's Mask (P. 3)

    Ill put my comments next to your version, because it's not letting me quote today (: very good btw The night was cold. Goose-bumps rose along my bare arms like ...

    Sep 14, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Beast. Death - 1

    I just read the first sentence and janet payne is my grandmothers maiden name. ill write a proper review in a minute! ... continued! That was incredible, I'll forgive you ...

    Sep 10, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: To Love Or Not To

    Loved everything. It was so beautifully written, It had our attention from the beginning to the end, and omg I want to read more! pm me if you put more ...

    Sep 9, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: I Need You To Write. - 2.

    I've just read basically everything you've written, because you're style of writing is crazily addictive! There's nothing I would change about any of your 'I need you to write' series, ...

    Sep 9, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Letters Chapter 1 & Prologue

    " It's not you I miss it's us" I bloody love that line, apart from now it's made me sad.. i have a theory, when i was with luke, everything ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: I missed having you in my bed.

    I loved this so much when I read it at yours (: It's probably because I love Lexi so much though to be honest, nothing to do with your amazing ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Angel's Mask (P. 2)

    Very very good! It was so easy to read, very well written, and you've obviously put a lot of work into the editing because I couldn't find any grammatical/ spelling ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Love is blind

    "Admittedly, unusual, before this point," I'm not sure the grammar in that sentence makes sense, or maybe just to make it read better you should leave out the first comma, ...

    Sep 8, 2009


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